Geezer
Geezer
Jun 17, 2020
This poem is part of the workshop:

Titles

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Gloves and Masks... [Title Shop]

I saw the Mime, with his gloves and mask
He tried hard to make me smile
I didn't think he was up to the task
Because, I hadn't smiled for a while

His silent laughter was so very plain
He had it in him, I realized
To take away my hurt and pain
I could see the smile in his eyes

He was no different than I'd seen before
His mask and gloves were of white
Black skin covered, he was hard to ignore
His merriment showed, his heart was light

I felt ashamed of my heavy heart
And so I laughed, I laughed out loud
I thought to myself, "I should do my part"
And I laughed with the rest of the crowd.

About This Poem

Last Few Words: Thank you to Rula for the nifty title! She is an inspiration to us here,

Style/Type: Structured: Western

Review Request Direction: How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - draft

About the Author

Region, Country: New York State - USA, USA

Favorite Poets: Poe

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Comments

S

I think this is very good for such a quickie

Geezer

As soon as I saw the Mask and Gloves title, I thought of a Mime. I just kind of came to me, that here was someone who is striving to make the world a little less scary and a bit brighter. ~ Gee.
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Rula

Rula

4 years 10 months ago

I thought this is really awesome and not without a noble message. Respect what others offer no matter how trivial it looks to you.
Well done re the suggested title. I won't have done it better myself.
Thank you.

P.s. You've chosen the "primal Poetry workshop where neededto choose the "Title workshop" instead.

Geezer

that you would have as well, if not better. You have imagination and a good heart; plus you gave me a great title!
Geez.
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Geezer

give me something to think about and I shortened a couple of lines and made the rhythm a little better. Thank you!
~ Geez.
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C

There is a message in your poem for all to see
Laugh no matter how much you hurt inside
who knows perhaps your mime washurting inside one never knows
what akind word or just a smile might do for a oerson

your poem holds a message for us all. smile and laugh no matter how much it hurts
give a smile or a kind word to someone as you never know what is going on insside
who know perhaps your mime was hurting inside but gave pleasure non the less

Geezer

me a little better than I thought. Yes, that was my intent, to take what he gave and give a little back; letting him know that he was appreciated. ~ Gee.
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Lavender

Hi, Geezer,
Aw...quite the unselfish giver, your Mime. You, too!
Thank you!
L