What Buddha Says

Mind is everything
What you think you can become
Why am I still poor

Style/Type: Structured: Eastern

Review Request Direction: How does this theme appeal to you?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

Region, Country: Nottinghamshire England, GBR

line one is 6 beats
line 2 is 6 beats
a haiku is 5/7/5 pattern

Hello thanks for your comment, I have updated
Hope its now correct number of syllables

that you have gotten it right this time. Nice. ~ Geezer.
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Hello!
Enjoyed your Haiku very much!
Thank you!
Lavender

Glad you enjoyed it ! Many thanks

so you may join
stan's titles workshop

perhaps
'Buddha said so'' OR
ENLIGHTEMENT OF BUDDHA
will be more apt
welcome
new poet of UK

hello from UK thanks for letting me join workshop titles
Sen