Geezer
Geezer
May 09, 2020
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Earthlings... [May Contest]

What an awesome place to live
This blue wrapped planet
Full of water
Circling a yellow star

They call it the Goldilocks zone
Not too far and not too close
Nobody here but us...
I wonder why no one comes to visit?

Maybe our neighbors are afraid of us
After all, we have let the place go to hell
Killed off most of the wildlife
And put up a parking lot

I see those unidentifieds zoom by
I'll bet they're scared of us
Kinda like being on the wrong side of the tracks
After dark

Frantic signals to Space Towing
Come quick, I'm stranded
Yeah, some fking place called Roswell
What do you mean, it's extra from here?

Do you take Galaxy card?

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - draft

About the Author

Region, Country: New York State - USA, USA

Favorite Poets: Poe

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Comments

Rula

Rula

4 years 11 months ago

I like this mix or reality and fantasy. The title is apt, but I wasn't pretty sure about the last line. Maybe a hint to help?

Geezer

like; "Ok, ok, I'll pay the extra, just get me outta here!"
Should I have said, Mastercard or Visa? ~ Geezer.
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Rula

I see now the humoe behind the last few lines. I see it's clear for everyone else so no edits needed.

Gracy

Gracy

4 years 11 months ago

Very good, Gee, and so true. A lovely blue planet destroyed by humankind. I have a feeling that there are better beings out there in Space. I like the humor at the end, the Galaxy card. They probably don't use money or cards out there. I'll return for a second read, it's made me think.

Geezer

they probably don't use money or cards, but it wouldn't have as funny or as explicit, if I said; I'll give you extra energy zolts. Or maybe it would. I doubt they are afraid of us either; I'll bet that their bombs are bigger than ours! It's probably all a big misunderstanding, because we don't have the same gray skin color and are pushing our satellites full of junk in more affluent neighborhoods. ~ Geezer.
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C

I loved it. "They paved paradise and put up a parking lot" good song. Your poem was amusing. It brought a much needed smile
good luck on the contest

Geezer

I made you smile. I don't think that I can be hit for using that line, do you? I hope not. That song just popped into my head as I was writing this. I am sure that if UFO's are piloted by aliens who are ages ahead of us, they must be appalled at the mess we have made of things here. ~ Geezer.
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Geezer

I thought so too, if I do say so myself [and I do]. I'm pretty sure that it is the Earth circling the sun, but... I could be wrong, I mean what do I know? After all, those priests are a lot more learned than I. I'm just a poor dolt with a sense of humor. ~ Geezer.
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Geezer

your Einstein, I found it humorous and in line with my beliefs. That we aren't alone and they are just avoiding us like bad neighbors. ~ Geezer.
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lovedly

It's just like you say
OK OK
But why have you used first letters
all in Caps
that I wonder....

Geezer

Geezer

4 years 11 months ago

all the lines are statements or questions, except for the one that begins with [And]. Not extensions of each other, except that they relate to each of the rest. ~ Gee.
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lovedly

with your justification Shall have to apply my mind again
But never mind
you are not entitled to a Prize
and I have won nearly four ever since
lol
none the less
best of luck Gee

Geezer

Geezer

4 years 11 months ago

I can start each line with a capital if I want to? Read it the way it reads, you will see. ~ Gee.
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