Sun is the center stage of life
morning -dawn- evening twilight
the sun does rise
it never sets
it's for ever rising
some where.else
The center of our universe
and also us
is the Sun
we must converse
as the sun leads us
from the distant hill
from where it emerges
till its zenith
then it sets for us only
in our distant horizon
beyond the vast ocean.
O poet you will be one day like the Sun
when poetry of great poets is being sung.
Hopefully
I will be along
to be with you
ere the setting sun
in the distance
o poetess well done
you already are well sung
I am fascinated
by the way you write.
I have lived
submerged in poetry
all my life
ask my wife
(disgusted is she)
but have never encountered
any Poet like ye.
You´re refreshingly and genuinely
different
In positive ways
poet and poetess I say
so I is extremely happy today
Comments
Since you are...
speaking of the poet as a [she], I can only assume that it isn't me that you are speaking of. LoL
I find that the long lines and the format makes this a bit difficult to read. ~ Gee.
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This was fom the ORIGINAL GEE
Shall simplify
as say ye
surely
Nice poem, just a bit wordy.
Nice poem, just a bit wordy. Methinks it needs tightenning up. Below I've given you an idea, to toss or take.
You´re [are] refreshingly and genuinely
[very] different!
In [a very]positive ways
poet and poetess I say.
so Iis very happy today
Sorry, what is lis? I live in Argentina and speak Spanish as well, so I tend to make mistakes or not understand.
I also think the dots are unnecessary. Just me.
Take care!
Thanks ma'am Gracy
now corrected gracefully