But for the cold calculating stare
of electric blue orbs
lightening flashing through them
you would think it human
Others blind their eyes
and deafen their ears
when in her presence
Faint whirs and clicking
are the only clue
that she no longer lives
Once filled with life's passion
flowing through every vein
the sole giving of all
to flora,fauna and mankind
soft murmuring voices
not unlike that of an old party line
once gave comfort
But the humanity she so loved
began tearing
piece after piece
of her flesh and bone
Voices became louder
more decernable
screaming words of hate,rage and anger
till not a shadow was left
from the essence of her being
Now
walking among them that are loathed
for creating the entity
standing before you
No longer to remember
the world that she knew
for there is no longer life
and she is reborn
of the hatred of man
Comments
Jerry
thank you for reading. I have fixed the typos
A cat , sorry no not a cat
a women alive and passionate until society and the like turned her bitter and cold as an android
Just a couple...
of small crits. I would use [has] instead of is, in the 7th stanza, first line.
And [of] instead of from in the last line. I remember Stepford Wives and was scared every time I saw a suburban Mommie in the supermarket; for years afterward! LoL I got the drift right away. ~ Geezer.
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Guy
thank you for visiting my poem
the is was suppose to be she so loved ( fixed that one)
yes I do like using of a lot better sounds more poetic
thanks for the suggestions
I was intrigued by that movie but then I am a fan of Ira Levine
I read the book (which is always better) before I saw the movie
Why not..
..check spelling and punctuation? This is pretty awful.
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