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Unlight
Jan 20, 2020

Us

Hand in hand,
there is no greater darkness
than the one that's growing steadily between us.

Hand in hand,
there is no greater darkness
than the one that's growing steadily between you and me.

United scars... the dripping blood
and a body that fears no one but itself!

As above, so we are: So below, as we are!

In the blink of an eye
stars collapse and we are here,
hand in hand and torn apart.
Can’t you hear the countdown?
Can’t you hear the clocks
that are ticking in our hearts?

And so we are
and so we have been
since the dawn of time:

Hand in hand.
And there’s no greater shadow
than the one we cast upon our own salvation.

We closed our minds to each other
So we could see nothing more
than a feeble glimpse.
And what we saw was that time flew in vain,
so there’s no room for ourselves.

And so we are
and so we have been
since the dawn of time:

Hand in hand.
And there’s no greater history
than the one we're writing with our own sweat.

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing Stage: Not actively editing

About the Author

Country/Region: Romania

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Comments

Edna Sweetlove

Edna Sweetlove

5 years 3 months ago

I found the repetition slightly irritating and also the unnecessary use of exclamation marks.
But interesting.

Geezer

but let's give the guy a chance to warm up! After all, it took him eight years to post his first work here. ~ Geezer.
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Unlight

Hello there!

Thank you for your comments, I really appreciate the input. Truth be told, I used to be an active member of Neopoet back in 2008, maybe 2009 and 2010 as well. The platform was very different back then, and yesterday I though to myself, after having received a notification in my Inbox, that I might share with you guys some of my new work.

It's far from being my first poem, although I appreciate the humor on this topic!

Cheers!
Ionut Popa