JUNGLE ZONE

Unity and Harmony
I've been breathing in cold like ice
Hoping to meet with the nature
Being without a dispute and torture
While the striving race speeds up
But in this zone where I find myself
Limping around the honey well
Longing to have a taste
But none has ever wet even the ground

Rather the particles of sugar i hope on
Has been conspired taken off my hands
Again I've been threatening of reaping
my heart and breathe
Just in sigh I took a walk away and vanished
Vengeance are of the great powers.

About This Poem

Last Few Words: Nowadays in our societies the laws are only applies to the masses especially when you are hustling and trying to survive.

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
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Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Nigeria , abuja

Favorite Poets: Any good poet of my likening

Comments

Yeah, it is a common

Yeah, it is a common phenomenon to some of us here in Africa, according to my understanding from stanza 2, suicide is not always a way out, though sometimes life can be tough.

Yes

You are right about that but what I really mean there is that I've got threaten by the same oppressors the who promised me that they are going to take my life if I refuse to walk away.