Rottiestyl
Rottiestyl
Oct 24, 2019

In The Dark Quiet

The powder piled in a isolated center on the hot liquid
Her head tilted, curious, as it simply melted down the dark quiet
Until the last grain stubbornly sank below the black scalding mirror

Yes, this was the way she lived it; the way she saw it, felt it, despised it
Slow, powdered, black and white
So God awfully hot that nothing could survive it
She just swallows and ignores the burn; in the dark quiet

K. Mulroney

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - draft

About the Author

Region, Country: USA - Illinois, USA

Favorite Poets: Shakespeare

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Comments

C

This is such a powerful write I read it interpretation though several correct me if I am wrong ut I saw suicide by drug overdose I may be far afield on this

Rottiestyl

Very insightful indeed. I never thought this could be felt that way. See, this is what I love about free verse poetry. The reader will always feel what they see, read. Abstract art is they same. Each person who views it, sees something new.
This actually is about a lonely woman simply watching the powdered cream in her coffee melt because it’s all she feels, sees, lives. Loneliness. That’s what burns. To her life is only black and white. You are either happy or sad. No gray areas for her. That’s the way she lives it, feels it etc. Your interpretation was again, very interesting. Thank you!

Geezer

it right before I read lynn's comment. I thought of the times that I had watched the very same powdered creamer drown in the black mirror of my coffee. Alone in the morning, can be very alone.
~ Geezer.
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Edna Sweetlove

Edna Sweetlove

5 years 4 months ago

Confused or what?