One who doesn't sin lives honorably
also shares knowledge with all human
donates all excess wealth amongst needy
He/She will be the next one from Heaven
One who doesn't sin lives honorably
also shares knowledge with all human
donates all excess wealth amongst needy
He/She will be the next one from Heaven
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Loved
This needs a good edit there seems to be some words missing as it doesn't flow.
The odd capital letter K but please sort it as it is not up to your usual writes,
Yours Ian ..
ANY better
Ian now are you in Q
Loved
(st needy) just a missed couple of letters that you will find on your Key board lol
Take care know I is watching lol
Yours, Ian ..
amongst
amongst
not accepted by compy says
among-st
OR
among
lol keep watching
till I
rflol
so FINALLY AM USING
SEE
Loved
I c u is a mused does this mean you will write better in the future with their help..
Take care, Yours, Yenti
a mused
OR
amused
which Ian
u rn't hoppy
ICU