dissolute neo transgressive
a fantasy lauded libertine
self mythologizer
writing ugly comments
on corrosive voids like black outs
broken verses sounded out
in mangled staccato
needing rearranged horizons
like olives without pimentos
and skies cobbled from
thatched metal bones
moonless poems with no dream life
words repeated
I
The
A
Dah
no naked glimpses
no clawing
not even a drop of blood to whiff
and already cauterized
lust-less
anemic-scapes of thorn-less rosettes
emptied of black tongued gimps
and tattooed whores
no Lilliputians
swimming in marsh swamps
and no snarling brays
remember
there are mouths to fill
with pounding gristle
and ears to bleed
like pull apart flake strudel
that squeals rapturously
shedding seas
of gagging exorcisms
so
widen your thighs
look into my eyes
Comments
haahaahaa
haahaahaa….. Im not much into manginas LOL
haahaahaa perhaps shes Latina
haahaahaa perhaps shes Latina in the mood for a manchalada
a couple of your similes
a couple of your similes intrigued me
like olives without pimentos
and skies cobbled from
thatched metal bones
and
/like pull apart flake strudel/
that squeals rapturously
shedding seas
of gagging exorcisms
I cannot easily get my mind around them, but they do cause me to stop and think. Your word use has musical quality that is pleasing. I could not paraphrase the poem but believe I feel its direction at a non-conscious level.
Thank you.... Part of it is
Thank you.... Part of it is exactly like you describe ...A poem can suggest; it can be a bit ambiguous and yeah language through metaphor and inference can entrance
I'm delighted that you experienced that...Very appreciated!
nice poem Z
I would drop the first stanza. The second is such a better, inviting stance.
try it. wdyt?