zebra
zebra
Jun 30, 2019
This poem is part of the workshop:

Primal Poetry

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Mortician's Kiss Goodbye Primal WS

I'm not coming back
no more vain rebellions

hello to nothing
from the minister of nothing
no ones home but shapeless shadows
cutting across mysteries
of multiple worlds

an empty head
so patient
ghost moon

my legs aren't tired anymore
here in the undergrowth
of slugs slides and slime
whispering hymns needle green

buoyant belly on the rings of night
libation of death
apprehending the void
dissolving doom broadens to immensity
like a light flicks on
wonder wave

no death for the dead
they could care less
nearby in endlessness
stretched out on a couch
spumed mouth
papyrus frail
creature of black steps

waking will not rise flame feathers

where I lived and was broken
noon day demons lost
I dangle from a nightingale floor
burning hair wings flutterless

linking one self with the other
like night with day
wind and dreams
falling lulls weave me together
like a thorne bridge weaves fate
hand over red hand

mind of winter
now I inhabit you
slain and shaken

About This Poem

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Country/Region: Florance MA USA

Favorite Poets: Plath

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Comments

themoonman

Couldn't leave without saying
how much I enjoyed reading

zebra

zebra

5 years 10 months ago

Many thanks . Glad you enjoyed this poem ...very much appreciate your comment :)

lonlyhrtsclub13

lonlyhrtsclub13

5 years 9 months ago

I thoroughly enjoyed this read- I could feel every emotion and word. What a vision that must have been to feel what it was like to be dead.

T

tyro

5 years 9 months ago

I very much like what you do with words and sonic combinations. The images are very powerful and kept my mind continually wondering. The associations held it all together for me.
Brovo.