Green Gold

Like a seed
You are so darn tough
On the outside

I’d like to see
What happens
If you burst forth

From the soil
Of acceptance
And warmth

What unravels
From your beautiful insides

Become verdant
Like green gold

Your nature's
Perfect contribution

About This Poem

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
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Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Maryland, USA

Comments

Excellent,

Excellent, Regards Roscoe...

thank you

how I wish

all our grass while 'tis green
becomes gold
unless you meant yellow
ere it once again becomes cold

thanks lovedly

Hi greg.

There I was just reading along enjoying this then came next to last line......i hate that typos bother me so much, maybe because I make so many lol. But anyhoo it should be : you're nature's. But I liked it since I took trouble to comment.....stan

good catch. fixed. thanks

good catch. fixed. thanks Stan.

i like the poem

but in truth not sure I totally get it (I guess another another word is "understand".) There are many things it could be, not so much a person to me as exploding from the inside kinda removes anything in the animal kingdom, as our insides, our guts, are not to me so "beautiful" or green gold like. So I'm not sure what it is, but in this case not sure it matters, unless you intended for me the reader to grasp something specific...