brittle light
brittle light
Mar 31, 2019

I Heard That

I heard that
the end is nigh
all you need is love
the Russians are coming
and sneakers make your feet stink
blondes are stupid
Jussie dindunuffin
the Arc has been found
and Michelle Obama is a man
vegans are healthy
broccoli cures cancer
spinsters are fun
and plaid panted hipsters are as cool as they come
the earth is flat
craft beers are good
sluts make fine brides
and pedos are misunderstood
nazis are everywhere and the KKK
the SPLC is not biased
that's what I heard just today

( ain't the internet grand! )

About This Poem

Last Few Words: SPLC (southern poverty law center)

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: upstate New York USA, USA

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Comments

Geezer

to find here. I like the thoughts, it flowed well and I read and re-read it a few times just to make sure that I got it all. ~ Gee.
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Eumolpus

my brain needs a bubblebath. Nice poem, combining the collage of crazy news.

I would really consider the ending...I knew something was coming, there were several possibilities until you say it at the end.

that's what I heard just today
( ain't the internet grand! )

I would redo those two lines as a couplet, rhymed perhaps for greater
effect. The whole poem becomes based in the sarcasm of the last line which can often finish a poem better as a couplet.

The only other aspect is the idea of "hearing" the internet...i think we see these headlines mostly as flash items, Google news and all that...we hear the radio or tv...or youtube, but that's not a headline resource. So might be what you "saw" today...

brittle light

I am a Youtube addict
I don't "watch" the talking heads
I listen and "hear" them
The lines in the the poem are my takeaways from whatever theme they were speaking of,
Not headlines.
But I can understand you making that assumption, and as written, the general audience may make that same observation as you did.

should I change it for that reason? maybe If this were to be published elsewhere (God forbid) I would...but for now I'll leave it alone

except for the ending... I really don't like it myself and will try to work it out as per your suggestion

thanks as always,