gregwa8
gregwa8
Mar 25, 2019

Gadzooks!

For some it takes
The barista getting their coffee wrong
For some it takes the flu
For some it would take nukes

To get them to finally say
Gadzooks

For some it takes
A fly’s little insistent buzz
For some it takes traffic
For some it would take a flood

To get them to say
Holy Mother of God

We all have a different
Threshold of pain

But the world is certainly
A complainer’s
refrain

About This Poem

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
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Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Maryland, USA

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Comments

Geezer

to give it to you for a title! Not sure about that many " For some" but, it does work. It reads well, but a little awkwardly with the line about "fly's little insistent buzz" but other than that... ~ Geezer.
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