dpoetessrock
Mar 24, 2019

Culture Vultures

whats hot to be got
keyhole behind the polls
controls what one knows

slave tactics
ratchet bracket
web analytics
phony statistics
a bucket of sh**t

land of milk & honey
blinded grind
underwater minds
statue of Liberty
we're not free

men in black suits
controls the loot
trampled dogs n bunnies
divided the poor
taxed middle-class a**es

leave earth
head to Mars
we don't need human stars
they're given too much control
it's in the music
and films.

About This Poem

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Country/Region: Baltimore/Maryland USA

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Comments

Eumolpus

Looks like a poem and is a poem.
Firstly in a world where the president (the chosen by god according to his press secretary) uses the word shit commonly. I think not spelling it out is a distraction on 2019. Best to use a different word. Same with ass.
I am not getting a clear message here. Men in black was a great film, but why are we not free? Why are middle class asses? What’s in the music and films.
Perhaps you wrote a poem about yourself you might begin to discover poetic truths not random cliche. That is the best place to start
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Geezer

supposed to be the business people of the world? The rich and famous? I agree that you should either spell the words out or use different words, it is a distraction. Ok, typos:
1} What['s],
2} control no [s]
3} divide no [d]
4} tax[ing] middle-class

So glad that you have decided to stick around, I'm anxious to see you improve! ~ Geezer.
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