dpoetessrock
Mar 21, 2019

Taking In The Day

scraping the sky
teary eyed
thunder zoom
heart booms
cutting loose
earth juice
hands band
stars boast
snow poke
birds slope
show boat
mountains peak
underneath
water seep
mystery ride
life's tide
waving days
winds leap
hip back
feet naps
sand base
happy place

About This Poem

Last Few Words: I'm getting the feel of rhyming with content. and I'm in the studying poetry stage as I post my current poems.

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
Is the internal logic consistent?

Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Country/Region: Baltimore/Maryland USA

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Comments

Geezer

I am primarily a rhymer and I like your poem. It has a nice rhythm to it and your word choices a good.
Your title drew me in as titles are supposed to. Your logic is consistent and the theme is one that stands in the light of many a poet! [One typo]: Scraping]. Welcome to Neo! It's always nice to see a new rhymer join us; as it seems that many people are enjoying the freedom from stricture in free-form.
I hope that you will take advantage of the many workshops and advice of seasoned poets here. Remember, you are not obligated to use the criticism and comments that you will get, but we do hope that you will participate in giving comments and critique! Even so little, as saying that you are appreciative of the theme and/or commenting on a particular line can give a poet, a feel good. Thank you and I hope that you will enjoy your time here and we will see more postings from you.
~ Geezer.
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zebra

zebra

6 years 1 month ago

I like it and welcome to Neopoet I do love word play :)