raj
Dec 04, 2018

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pods bursting with seeds
get scattered in autumn wind
springing surprises

About This Poem

Style/Type: Structured: Eastern

Review Request Direction: How does this theme appeal to you?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Somewhere in the world, IND

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raj

6 years 4 months ago

for your good words...though to some drafts such...it was my attempt to show how drafts transform into pleasant surprises once worked upon over a period of time [autumn to spring]...in fact this was inspired by the photo "drafts do suck" which i read as "do drafts suck"..:)
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R

that's the intriguing aspect of a poem...where different readers perceive it differently...
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R

sounds good to me...however by "springing surprises" the intended meaning is the seeds scattered in autumn become seedlings in spring...so what do you think?
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raj

6 years 4 months ago

Done. Final. No Longer editing.

Namaste
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lovedly

each one has
and is permitted to have
his own perspective
mine mostly is erotic
what my eyes have seen
springing in autumn in parks
seeding em the result is obvious
in later spring
autumn winter and spring 9 months
this is my Western opinion

a poet can only compose
none can dictate
how to read or imagine
except in prose
like the door was open can have no second meaning
it door was open
but in poetry it would or could mean
an invitation to...xyz
just imagine the difference
thanks