hand on her shoulder
worth a million flowers
blooming in desert
Dec 01, 2018
Gesture [Attempted Haiku]
About This Poem
Last Few Words: Also an attempt at implied imagery
Style/Type: Structured: Eastern
Review Request Direction: How does this theme appeal to you?
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
hmmmm,
hmmmm,
i am not sure what does it mean?
hand on her shoulder
Hi IRiz
it's a gesture of consolation...that's what is implied...
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Maybe than her hand on my
Maybe than her hand on my shoulder?
Maybe than her hand on my
Maybe than her hand on my shoulder?
Hi IRiz
yes it could be what you said, but here it is intended to be a gesture of comforting her who is feeling desolate, hence the third line has the word desert..
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my thought raj
this is when one is bereaved
and you place a hand
as in a hug around the shoulders
silent consolation it conveys
immensely
Thanks for reading Lovedly.
Thanks for reading Lovedly.
Yes it is a gesture of comforting someone but not necessarily during bereavement but whenever someone feels alone or desolate.
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