Geezer
Geezer
Sep 07, 2018

Deja vue...

There, there it is again
A place in time, I'd touched before
Where, where in when, I'd been again?
I reached for it, trying to touch once more

Just out of my grasp, the feeling swayed
None else it could have been
The thought, indeed that it was played
But, I didn't know it then.

About This Poem

Style/Type: Structured: Western

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - draft

About the Author

Region, Country: New York State - USA, USA

Favorite Poets: Poe

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Comments

Rula

Rula

6 years 7 months ago

This reads just like a dream or a dreamy feeling.
I especially liked this line:
"Just out of my grasp, the feeling swayed"

I always wonder why do poets choose a french title for an English piece. Just saying.
Thank you for sharing

Geezer

I was trying to describe the feeling of Deja vue ! I don't know that there is another word for, or words that describe the situation. I will think upon the idea and mayhap come up with a new title in English. ~ Geezer.
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lovedly

means the same in all languages

Psychology
the feeling that one has had an experience previously, although it is actually new to one
2.
a feeling that one has been in a place or had a specific experience before

so your poetry is abs unique
Deja vue(ish)
great Gee

R

raj

6 years 7 months ago

good theme in this short write...
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Geezer

Actually, you are way too kind. I merely managed to get what I was feeling into the script. Your accent is just right for this. Gave me a bit of a chill hearing it in that Aussie/British tone. It so much reminded me of "A Clockwork Orange" or perhaps a scene from "The Wall" I like the echoing sound of the whole thing. Yes, yes, post it, if you will! ~ Gee.
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