Waiting Patiently

I've stared at stars endlessly
I've liked the way they smile up there in the sky,
the shiny ones and the white ones
I've wondered when our black stars will shine.

when will it shine
from this harassment of mosquitoes-
begging me at night as if were lovers
demonic toilets and bathrooms
waiting for whom to possess
baby crying in a one room apartment of hungry six brothers,
angry sisters, mother and father.

my black star,
will i ever see you shine?
will i ever see you smile and dance with your brothers white
i will patiently until the blacks shine.

About This Poem

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About the Author

Region, Country: Nigeria , Abuja, NGA

Favorite Poets: John Donne

Comments

Hello chiori

It's painful and heart breaking when pushing hard to archive a desire but yet watching it passing you by, no doubt you are feeling the heat but the only best way is waiting patiently. Thanks for this poem.