raj
Aug 17, 2018

I-You-We-Us

when I becomes We,
there's a lot to gain for Us

the way I see You and You see Me
is crucial for Us

if You and I, can give n take a Wee bit
life is more harmonioUs

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Direction: How does this theme appeal to you?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Somewhere in the world, IND

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Comments

Rula

Rula

6 years 8 months ago

that was felicitous. It goes for everytime.
Simply exquisite dear raj!

Rula

Rula

6 years 8 months ago

noticed the ending "harmonioUS"
This is a really a rich theme and yours is very inspiring.
Thank you for sharing this dear raj

R

raj

6 years 8 months ago

thanks for your reading and good words...you are right there is a U in harmonious which is why i capitalized it to make it prominent...

the underlying message i am trying to bring out is that if nations in long conflicts such as Israel and Palestine find credibility in these lines perhaps there is a greater chance of resolving the conflict...I don't necessarily mean conflict between nations but also day to day conflicts between people and even trifles between partners..

i don't know if this message is getting delivered....
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Rula

Rula

6 years 8 months ago

is general. It's applicable in many situations, but the situation is a bit quagmire in the case you mentioned about Palestine and the Israeli occupation. Imagine a minority to invade India. Would the indians ever live with them in peace?
If not for America to support it, Israel would never be existing till now

R

Appreciate your thoughts ...it would be applicable to similar situations is what i meant...giving Israel-Palestinian as an example...it would be applicable for even Indo-Pak for that matter...anyways it's just a thought though there are many other ramifications which increase the complexity...
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Geezer

can boil it down to one simple sentence! "Do to others as you would have them do to you!" I loved the word-play and the pace went right along. Nice! ~ Geezer.
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R

raj

6 years 8 months ago

for reading and the one liner...this is similar to that but with some more elements built into it...

thanks again..
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