AUGUST CONTEST

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Why Did I Love You

Forever is long gone,
Tis tomorrow we bid farewell,
Now is reckoned,
Today is that reality.

The bell is tolled,
Walking down the aisle,
It's that resplendence,
My bride once my pride,
All but nostalgia.

How did this come to be?
romance all brilliance
bereft of tolerance,
Perchance all is nuisance,
Capacity full of clutter
Pshaw! What a charade.

Were memories fungible,
trying despite blemishes of self,
my question still arises,
Why did I love you?

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Direction: How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?
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Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Country/Region: U.S.A.

Comments

nice one here

if t is a contest entry u may see rules etc
MARK it as for contest
I am going to compose
soonly

Thanks

I appreciate your reminder.

besides good linguistic skill

besides good linguistic skill this poem also demonstrates how the choice of words w.r.t. their weightage amplify the meaning,,,instead of longer lines to convey the same...
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Gratitude

You're right. I appreciate your comments. I will continue to get better.

Hello Mike

Thanks for introducing me to some new words especially "charade"
I thought the thought in the last stanza completes that in the one before the last, so I thought there is no need for the break maybe?