raj
Aug 04, 2018

generation gap

leaves perish, baring branches, trees grieve a generation gone,
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About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Direction: How does this theme appeal to you?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Somewhere in the world, IND

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Comments

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tyro

6 years 8 months ago

there is a very crystal quality in this.
only I do not like the last word, there is negativity associated with it, maybe gone is an idea, or some other neutral word.really like this one, it is finely structured.

R

thanks for the read....i liked your suggestion and reason for it and accepting it unless I find an alternative...good to know you liked clarity of thought and the structure...
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lovedly

generation in human is 30
and in trees only one another circle
but a generation none the less

lovely single liner creation,an intelligent rendition