hopeless_writer
Jul 04, 2018

key

i have many shut doors
each locked with a key
many skeletons in my closet
ones you'll never see

secrets i have many
hid in away in my keep
some secrets i'll tell you
if they stay between you and me

if i let you into my life
shut the door behind you
whatever secrets i share with you
are only for you

and if you unveil my secrets
if the whisper tempts my soul
and your mouth forms the
forbidden words
return
your
key

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raj

6 years 9 months ago

what i read in your poem that the key to hold a relationship together is confiding in each other but should that promise be broken the door is shut forever without a compromise..
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