brittle light
brittle light
Jun 11, 2018

Bait Thoughts

bon vivants annoy me

early teen girls are scary

smart people tend to think
they have no character flaws worth mentioning

credit where credit is due; lazy people ARE aficionados of "chillin"

stupidity doesn't mean one is bad, but it is definitly dangerous

pretty women live in an altered state

stop knocking bass players, they can't help it

skinny chefs insinuate dubious skill

prancing musicians - STOP IT

losers and fishermen are prolific inventors of excuses

who wouldn't want a trophy wife (as long as the pre-nup is solid)

politicos, preachers, and pundits are mankind's favorites (NOT)

...lastly, and most importantly;

never let a debonair dude near your woman

About This Poem

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - draft

About the Author

Region, Country: upstate New York USA, USA

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Comments

themoonman

Never, she'll be smitten and gone

enjoyed your thoughts

IRiz

IRiz

6 years 10 months ago

I wonder what is behind the joke?
I enjoyed the read, yes, like everything i find on your page, it is a treat and a puzzle.
Is there a fear of finding yourself not to belong to any of the old convenient labels?
or a fear being rejected, to hear scary loud bright multi-head NO?
or is it a disappointment of finding how shallow the mysterious creatures could be?
I think the last one is the most probable, and I think that is what feeds your muse perhaps more often than you would want it. But hey, the result is great.
So if you need a new disappointment, I can help. ( In US people usually add that they have been joking. I do not favor this tradition. )

brittle light

I ain't a'scared a nothin'

bait fish are used to catch bigger fish
bait thoughts are used to provoke big responses

and only incidentally, to make fun of people who fit a stereotype to the max

you are a mysterious creature, for sure,
but as far as you're concerned, this time it will be me who disappoints (no joke)

I believe you are gifted, I am just a smart ass

IRiz

First, I apologise for my comment, it is personal instead of to be about a poem. But I have an excuse, my sincere interest in your poetry. There is a borderline that is too thin not to cross sometimes.

If you are not afraid to dissapoint, I welcome you to the club of lost cases where I am a chairman. Hahaha.
If you are what you call Smart Ass, I hope one day I will graduate to the title.

brittle light

as Groucho Marx once quipped, "I wouldn't want to be in any club that would have me as a member"
even one as appropriate as 'The club of of Lost (Causes)

no apology ,please. I don't think there are any set rules of etiquette about how personally
two people are allowed to relate on the www.com or Neopoet specifically .
sometimes , after an extended amount of time, we want to drop the formality and stuffiness, and get real. Why not? How can that hurt the poetry?

your interest in my work is flattering to say the least