raj
May 27, 2018

Saltpan

beaten hard under a harsh sun
losing all sap in the burning urn
left behind are white crystals
adding taste from pan to pan

good deeds no matter how small
though unseen still stand out

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Somewhere in the world, IND

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Comments

chevyvent

"beaten hard under a harsh sun
losing all sap in the burning urn", very good choice words:
In words that are simple from the brigade of taste.
Takes you away through both time & space
We learn to embrace each an every step of the way
Words that could uplift & heal;
Here are a few of such delicate pieces:

R

raj

6 years 11 months ago

Thanks Mario for the read and comment...
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IRiz

IRiz

6 years 11 months ago

I like this one a lot.
Meter is pretty strong.
Idea is conveid by fresh words.
A pleasure to read.

R

raj

6 years 11 months ago

for taking time to read and appreciative comment. Means a lot when poets like you do that.
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