gregwa8
gregwa8
May 26, 2018

Nervous System

do something that scares you
tell the story
sing the song

there is a thrill
to doing
as well as being

pursuing
and not just breathing

there is a time
to count your breaths
and your blessings
to let your thoughts
pass like a movie
on the screen
of your mind

but what if you never
actively visualized
yourself winning
the boxing match
the big award
the lover?

let your passions
send you
from tree
to ground
to sky
like the bird
with its fluttering
heartbeat

be nervous
but don't let your
nervous system
down

with all of its
extraordinary
fearsome
potential

About This Poem

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?

Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Maryland, USA

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Comments

Jackweb

there is mutual connectivity between each lines. You never halted the rhythm of the poem. It runs from beginning to end and that creates pure originality of poetic thought.