Planting Hope

As I wake up
I need to refill
the morning glass of hope
to back me through
the long day's turmoil.

so I decided
to plant a rose
blooming with prayers.

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Jordan, JOR

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Comments

good positive thought put in

good positive thought put in these short verse form.

just wondering if Seeding Hope would be a good title...i couldn't understand why you prefized your itle with # as too these $#t suffixing Line 3
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Just a thought

dear raj. Sometimes such thoughts urge you to scribble them down no matter how trivial they are. This one was just one of these and this is exactly how every word was heard in my head.
Always appreciate your dear thoughts.
Many thanks.

I replaced the $#t to turmoil

I replaced the $#t to turmoil. Hope it reads better now.

Hi again Rula

Your poem is lovely and has a good soft feel.

I wish to point out that in the first stanza Line 1 and Line 4 are not in sync. I mean line 1 speaks about waking waking up whereas line 4 is about end of the day turmoil. In that context you may need to bring them in sync. Hope you know what I mean. I thought worthy of sharing this with you
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Thank you

again raj!
I did some few edits. Any better?

Rula

Yes the revised version is spot on. A small tweak did the trick :)

Just curious..was this inspired by what you may have read in the Koran?

Warmly...

Raj

much appreciate the time and your continued priceless visits.
As for the last line perhaps, "blooming with prayers", as an idea is yes it is in the holy Qura'an as everything has its pray, man, plants and animals... etc. Hence came the idea.
Thank you dear friend.