T. Harmonee
T. Harmonee
May 22, 2018

On My Knees

God, you listen to my worries
And cries the capture sleep
The aches that come profoundly
And leave me somewhat meek

The time I spend
Down on my knees
Is time that stands so still
These words that stagger out my mouth
Are daggers set to kill

About This Poem

Style/Type: Structured: Western

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
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Editing Stage: Editing - draft

About the Author

Region, Country: United States, USA

Favorite Poets: Billy Collins

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Comments

R

raj

6 years 11 months ago

Looks to me that this poem was inspired by the minor girl Noura Hussein in Sudan who was married forcibly at age 15 I think and killed her husband because she as forced by circumstances when he tried to rape her and has been sentenced with death about which there is a world wide outrage

I don't know if i perceived this correctly.
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T. Harmonee

No it wasnt inspired by that. Just represents feelings of a burdened person kneeling to pray.

R

Ok. I got it all wrong. Anyways it is a nice poem.
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Mallory

The persona in the poem was in melancholic mood and is quite obvious the words are so plain to grasp the situation of the person in the poem facing.