An eerie shiver,
A spinning head,
Lips quiver,
Confusion ahead,
mistakes,
Ruin a day,
Derail a week,
stuipidity,
Dreary feeling,
Watering eye,
Anxious thinking,
I tried...
I FUCKED UP!!
An eerie shiver,
A spinning head,
Lips quiver,
Confusion ahead,
mistakes,
Ruin a day,
Derail a week,
stuipidity,
Dreary feeling,
Watering eye,
Anxious thinking,
I tried...
I FUCKED UP!!
Review Request Direction:
What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Nice one.
Nice one.
Makes me want to make a mistake or two.
Dear Hopeless Writer through
Dear Hopeless Writer through this poem you have given hope to those who make a mistake or two...no one is perfect...
................
I fuck up on a regular basis
and despise wimps who say 'I made poor choices'.
A strong poem. I like it.
thanks
for the insight ill check out those workshop