Why is coloring in the lines pretty,
But outside it is not.
What’s the point in being witty,
If my lines are all I’ve got.
Apr 08, 2018
Not just kids color outside the lines...
About This Poem
Review Request Direction:
What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Hi Scooby
Nice thought provoking short piece with good rhyme...I was into your poem up to line 3 but lost my way in line 4...are you saying people give more attention to face value than they give to what the person says?...if it's so you have really sent a great message...
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Short but sweet
Really gives cadence to the simple thoughts of granduer