Dennis Go
Dennis Go
Jan 29, 2011

Prose & Poetry

Someone dropped a pen.
His name was Prose.
"Write." Said he.
"Use it to bind ideas
With its tears as the rope."
So I tried.
But my strength
Rattles with his weight.

"Let me interfere."
Said Poetry.
"Scrape what you have done
And let your heart
Do the talking."
So I did.
Now I speak
In deeper linings.

About This Poem

Last Few Words: Thanks Amalzamani for the tip. "on" changed to "with" on the last line of the first stanza.

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Manila, PHL

Favorite Poets: R.S. Thomas

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Comments

Dennis Go

Using the pen to bind ideas with its (tears - ink) as the rope.

Thanks for the suggestion. I'll try to internalize on this.

S

well the 2 above addressed my main concerns lol. Did you mean"Scrap what you have done"? A good theme on the power of poetry over prose, I think.............scribbler

Dennis Go

I'd rather use scrape meaning "gather".

Thanks for your suggestion.