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Mar 04, 2018

COLD RAIN MUSINGS

Late winter rain taps on the tin
of the roof of my small home
asking, perhaps, to be let in.
It's tapping echoes in my dome.

The echoes shake loose memories
from cob webs undisturbed for years
which drift like milk weed on a breeze
and unseize memory's stiff gears.

Young days when hills were not so steep,
jack frost crunching beneath boots
during the cold of winter's deep
while far away a barred owl hoots.

And those times I went afield
with all the older folks now gone;
how the forests way back then appealed
even through an early morning yawn.

And farther back when a mere child
playing on a pure white gulf coast beach
when "cold" was actually quite mild.
Sand spurs were thick beyond tide's reach.

But all those days are far away
as age tightens its firm grip on me.
Still in this time grown chill and gray
I at least can call on memory.

About This Poem

Style/Type: Structured: Western

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: South Carolina, United States, USA

Favorite Poets: Frost

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Comments

Stan

I am pretty sure this gem was inspired by the late winter havoc in spite of which you stayed cool enough to come up with this poem which walked e through the years from your childhood on to the present.

Just a thought..would this tiny change be better:-

and start up memory's stiff gears
and shift memory's stiff gears

Stay warm friend...
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Hi Raj

Thanks for the idea. I'll keep it in mind when I edit this. And yes I'm a see and say kind of poet and we had a long cold rainy spell recently.............stan

i liked "see and say kind of

i liked "see and say kind of poet"...i must say that you have said so nicely what you have seen...you are humble to say you are a "see and say type of poet" which i would call "spontaneous" ...
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OK raj

I gave a lot of thought to your suggestion but it just didn't seem to deliver the sense of the gears having been frozen. But I DO appreciate your input

No issues Stan

Fact of life is suggestions may not always work. Appreciate your trying though..

Regards..