vandiemenspeak
vandiemenspeak
Mar 01, 2018

Elizabeth’s dream.

When I departed Elizabeth’s dream
nobody heard her imperious screams
Silent they were to this treacherous boy
ragging on antipodean soil

Silent they were to this frenzied ear
Clearing the air in some hemisphere
as earth is to earth, I’m the heir
of a strangling secret that no-one dare

Talk without shame, in polite company
though this is a thing all feel quite plainly
When Elizabeth vein, lowers her drawers
and all of the commoners, shown to the door-

Perhaps that vestibule, pitched where they are
will congregate swiftly, talking of scars
finely fine, blend unblemished air
And all those lost souls will know

What it was to be fair.

About This Poem

Last Few Words: Alright, "structured-ish"- this literally was a dream, more of a song, a lyric idea of fleeing the old country and finding new secrets down under. Wanted to get out while raw, hope it strikes a chord. cheers.

Style/Type: Structured: Western

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Tasmania,Australia,Earth,Solar Systems,Milky way,Pint of Guniess, AUS

Favorite Poets: Glen Richards

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Comments

V

some word swapping and choices, i think you've let the chick out.

Nice work, enjoyed.

Best wishes....val

Obadiah Grey

Awwww, I'm glad its only "structured-ish", it allows for the pedant in me to say,,
whoooo, this could be good ! but for a few omitted salient words, (in essence, I'm jealous)

Obi.