Springtime
I hear tones
of nature speak
grass blades
earth's insects
animal life
awoke
from their
winter slumber
Springtime
I hear tones
of nature speak
grass blades
earth's insects
animal life
awoke
from their
winter slumber
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I liked this and created for
I liked this and created for me the sounds of Spring. Since you hear sounds from multiple sources simultaneously, please see if "buzz" would be a good replacement to read as
Springtime
I hear buzz
of nature speak
make change only if you find it suitable
hugs...
Sounds good
Too me
Simple
Yet beautiful. Especially since I have spring fever right now. Been a long dream winter. I am ready for spring sounds and sighs. Well written
Nice poem!
Nice poem!
Buzz is a summer thing to me,
It alliterates with earth and blades.
Tones enhances the word awoke.
Thanks IRiz
Glad to have your perspective
Hi Barbara
Please ignore my suggestion and revert to the one from our learned friend. In retrospect I now feel foolish for making suggestions...
Hi raj
I appreciate your suggestion. I have a sunku just for you my friend. Be on the lookout. It’ll have the word buzz in it. Smiles
Lovely!
https://vocaroo.com/i/s1UUadgMBfIN
Thanks
Glad you like it