OUT OF THIS WORLD

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This is me ("Feb Contest")

I became aware
There in the evening of my time
I looked at things past
I had to smile no chaos

I watched for many years
There the world turned
It was kind to my ways
Quiet thoughtful days.

Now as night comes
It seeks to bend my time
I resist saying I am fine
These days are the best.

I watched as stars shone
They have always stayed for me
Twinkling in the night
The sun shone during the day

I was warmed deep inside
Yet travelled alone as always
Giving, yet hoping that one day
All my needs would be fulfilled

In the world a soul brushed mine
I could only watch another time
It is as all seekers see in reality
That there is one waiting for me

About This Poem

Last Few Words: Just a jotting for Feb's contest..

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Direction: How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: UK, GBR

Favorite Poets: Wordsworth

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Comments

Hi Ian

This is a beautiful melancholic poem. I guess the organizers of the contest are going to find it tough to choose a winner.

Thanks for the experience of feeling the emotions flowing through your pen.....

Best wishes and regards...

Raj

Many thanks for your comment on this piece, it flowed with my feelings from the tip of my pen, though I had to tap a few keys to transpose it to the reader lol,
Take care my friend and great to see you here walking with my thoughts,
Yours as always Ian..