JULY CONTEST

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I will be glad

So many things have happened that makes me depressed
Making me feel like a victim and an oppressed
But today I have decided to be glad
No matter what happens I refuse to be sad

About This Poem

Last Few Words: Its about me......

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?
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Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Katsina Nigeria, NGA

Comments

Simple and elegant, well expressed.

May I suggest that in the line
Making me feel like a victim and an oppressed [the word 'an' is unnecessary]
either
Making me feel like a victim and oppressed
or
Making me feel like a victim and an oppressed being