It flows like a river
Which flooded many kinds
It conceives confusion
Though all were aware
The joy and happiness we had
But the smoke of hardship
And the dust of poverty overwhelm.
The Beginning of a new dawn
The sunrises with hope
For better sight and good Vision
For a fresh struggle and hustle
We are all concerned
The time must be our partner
When the year is still an infant
Never lose hope.
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Direction:
What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft
Comments
Hope
I like the title of your poem.Your language use is good. I like the beginning and end of the poem.
The ryhthm is good too. My User name is Eulekia you can contact me with your comments at my email address ifeanyiiweze@yahoo.com
Thank you
God bless you Eulekia surely I will getting touch with you.
A nicely woven poem ,Simon,
A nicely woven poem ,Simon, and quite inspirational. Thanks for sharing and all the best.
Thanks.
Thank you for giving me hope, God bless you
nice one bro
good luck to the contest
Thank you my HM
Sorry for all inconvenients I will do just that,thanks once again for your incouragemeant & advice.
greetings
A good poem but to be eligible for the contest you need to also post a western classic (rhyming) version .......stan
Thanks.
Alright I understand, thank you so much.
Hi
I Like your poem but unfortunately it is written in only a single form which disqualifies it from contest. I hope this doesn't discourage you from entering contests but please be sure to read each contest's parameters........stan
Hi Simon
Hi Simon
Waiting for you to post part 2 in western classic format...part 1 as many have commented before me is pretty smooth and crisp..making you I think a strong contender for winning the contest should you post a good part 2 as well
Regards and best wishes...
alas
deadline for entering is passed.But seeing this in western classic would still be a good thing. Heck the contests are mostly for fun after all....stan