flowers fragrance called
soon bees enfolded petals
relishing nectar
Jan 13, 2018
#haiku 2
About This Poem
Review Request Direction:
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Thank you so much remark, I
Thank you so much remark, I appreciate this comment so much.
Nice, Marvel,
no where near as good as the first one I read. Try numbering them so we can compare them and refer to them.
I suggested you name your sonnets, because not to compares oneself to Shakespeare, which comparison none of us can sustain!
So maybe just number the haikus, which are not supposed to be named.
Alright Jess, I will do the
Alright Jess, I will do the numbering.Thanks for the comment Jess.
Haiku are meant to stand each alone
but us poets just fucking love breaking the rules,eh?
This is a series of haiku/senryu I did on a theme.
https://www.neopoet.com/node/2669