Barbara Writes
Barbara Writes
Jan 24, 2011

A Bayliner Across Oceans

My my my looks like fun
speeding across ocean waters
over blue ripples
under summer sun

The cool wind mixed with warmth
blowing in my hair
under summer clouds
in a red and white boat screaming.

If only I weren't afraid
of the vast waters
enveloping my soul
taking away my breath

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: United States, USA

Favorite Poets: Billy Collins

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Comments

Barbara Writes

Thanks for the suggestions. I think they are good. The one about screaming loud would not describe me. In a situation like that I'm not screamer but is quiet, I would grab a hold of you burying my head the whole time. You could not pry me away lol.

Barbara Writes

As usual I know nothing about everything. I've never been around a bay liner only seen on TV. I saw an add advertising one for sale on face book marketplace.and it look like fun. So I imagine fun and wrote about what it might feel like.

As you may have realize by now I don't follow conversations very well. A story of my life. Lol