raj
Jan 28, 2011

Never Call Your Soup Insipid

Standing by a kiosk
slurping on my soup
finding it insipid
I was about to throw
when my eyes gazed through
a pair of famished eyes
fragile and empty
like a pair of beggar's bowls
crystals in my eyes
turned my soup saline
spoonfuls of that syrup
lit up those vacant eyes
watching those rainbows
cleared my misty eyes
easing the storm
brewing inside

I paid up at the Kiosk
for a handsome gift
thanking the lad
for his generous Tip,
"never call your soup
insipid again"

I walked home
a millionaire!!

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Somewhere in the world, IND

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loved

loved

14 years 3 months ago

the man who heard me standing by

was the owner ,

he replaced it

and charged nothing

how grateful ,

no not for me,

his image saving

he bowed
so others could see

mand

mand

14 years 3 months ago

Woow! I love this one. The change in perspective - the boy was so grateful. I love the expression "his smile was enough to turn grains of salt in my eyes into sugar",

I paid the cashier
and thanked the lad
for his generous tip
"never call a soup insipid"
I walked home
a millionaire!

This is so human!

Thank you for sharing.

Love Mand xxxxxx

R

thank you for your kind words....i just revamped the poem..you may want to re-look at it if you happen to visit this page again...

much love...

R

thank you for your comment..surely you caught the essence of this write and the bitter truth...

much love..

loved

loved

14 years 3 months ago

You Were A Millionaire

Very few folks
Love to share
Even free air
You gave the kid your soup to share
Twere best both were
Lovely millionaire
About in the air
Your love with each other
You did share.

R

raj

14 years 3 months ago

In reply to by xena465

i appreciate your comment and thank you for pointing out the errors which i will coreect immediately..

much love

S

no matter the hardships we endure, we never have to look far to find someone in far worse shape..................scribbler