Marvel Godwyn
Marvel Godwyn
Oct 31, 2017

Love is a peace weapon

The seamless seed of beatitude is love,
helplessly for its lushness we all crave.
Love genuine , breeds, nurtures peace;
erects a podium for elegance.

Hate, strife, could be carried in a gurney,
through a long, doomed and return less journey,
into a dark lonely ignoble hearse,
with a great unstoppable speed and ease .

If love across the universe is strewn,
until true blissfulness on earth is known
and everyone of us croons with one voice
from our hearts, harmonious songs of peace.

When we all sow the seed of beatitude,
flawless bliss will be savored in plenitude.
we will cling in assent a warm embrace.
Harmony will reign amongst every race.

And no eyes again shall be shrouded in tears,
for gone will be all frets, angst and fears
from mean affronts of racial differences,
for no more shall we speak with different voices.

Love is a perpetual peace weapon,
differences in a flicker it weakens.
With it racism, dissent, we can impale
and prejudice, strife, sunk in the dale.

About This Poem

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft

About the Author

Country/Region: Nigeria

Favorite Poets: Jess Tapper

More from this author

Comments

Eumolpus

Each poet has a mission to write poetry. Sometimes we try to use it as a liberating expression using the beauty of words and images to express our inner personal experiences, transfer them to a poetic universe which makes them swell will meaning, catharsis, hope. Sometimes we become philosophers using poetry, no logic or other philosophical system, to express truth. Sometimes it takes the place of prayer.
Your poem is like a sermon using a poetic style. Most of the people who read it will be totally on your side, totally agree with you..I, for one, am after all, from the "Love Generation" of babies born 1940's-50's. If you consider your audience, you are "preaching to the choir". So it is not for me to
not compliment you on the work, which is successful in getting the point across.
You must follow your heart. But i would juts like to suggest we take a very hard look at this very modern world we live in, with all the undreamed possibilities of connection and also the undreamed corruption of the human spirit among us. The Beatles sang "all you need is love", Bob Marley gave us many songs too, and we all sang along. I think I have learned we do need more...and to understand this love we must also understand our hate. and to do that, we must understand ourselves. Poetry is one way we can attempt to do that, but we have to dig deep into ourselves.
May I suggest you read Walt Whitman.He sings of himself and the world in such a way as to connect him, his presence, so it is both deeply personal and preaches of hope.

weirdelf

You need to think about why I stumbled,

My two new critiques will make it more clear. One of poems I was not so keen on on, the other was brilliant.

It is very important to reply to my critique as to where and why you agree and disagree with me.

weirdelf

small changes can make a huge difference. This is the spirit of Neopoet.
I'm proud to be working with you, Marvel.