I trace your jaw line with my tongue.
Tasting salty flesh.
I surround your Adams Apple with my lips.
I kiss my way down your chest
With gentle suction.
Then nibbles causing, sensuous reverberation
Phallic surrender, as you pay attention
and I travel lower.
Caressing with my hand.
The target is found and zero in,
I go in for the kill
and you surrender.
Moist lips lock
erotic after shock.
We lose control.
Comments
OOH Shirl
Do you think it's too much ? Damn that parkinsons medication lol
lou
hi louise
hey there lord what can a shy Irish man say
about this lol, the wording in very good ,
the title sits perfectly ,,,,zigs
Dear Lou...
the use of subtle words in this write work like magic...no wonder Shirl said she felt the tingles..this write does create vivid images of the coital act without being obscene...thats the beauty of this poem...
erotica
For those who don't know the difference between erotic and pornographic, this is a wonderful example of the former. Now to go take a cold shower lol..............scribbler
sensuous
non porno
but shall do
and
explicit in view
I don't know if it was the
I don't know if it was the coital act Lou was er...expressing. however, I sure think the last line "you're under my control" doesn't belong after "erotic after shock". At this point I'd say he's lost control and in that way, so have you. ;-)
~A
p.s. Nice progression/evolution in this poem from the one you originally wrote...which is more cerebral less evoking the senses.
Xena
Glad u liked it, i needed express myself a little lol Ill sort the I out
love lou
THANKS ALL
Thank you for reading, glad you all liked it, hope it wasn't too rude lol
love lou