fink555
fink555
Nov 03, 2017

Factory Music

Hold the photograph
where her marble eyes
cut off the chinoiserie tea pot just
and force me to take this from you
This cellular gold stamp between a chance
and nothing
Her nose casting a shadow
in the darkroom’s catalog
because this is the only way
I can know her;
Through her ruin’s ministry,
the tempo’s dictate
dead as a phone line
in one moving picture’s end
Where she waits near the slab
as a sick cat pawing the cord’s
end as a moon garland.

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Country/Region: Albany NY

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Roscoe Lane

Very good liked this a lot, beautiful imagery. Regards Roscoe...