Targets those who ail
Making them tread deadly trail
The beastly Blue Whale
Sep 13, 2017
Lame Game:
About This Poem
Last Few Words: Invasion of privacy (numerous social websites) , surveillance and eavesdropping (Big Boss) and mind control and torture (Blue Whale) are just social mirrors of the political environment, where all rights and privileges of the citizenry can be summarily suspended using the all encompassing and convenient cover of security. It is unfortunate that the name of the largest mammal has been misused for a convoluted, cruel and criminal game.
Style/Type: Structured: Eastern
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft
Comments
Hi,
While I appreciate your passion,
if you have to write a paragraph
explaining your Haiku it has failed.
A Haiku stands on it's own and I
never would have understood the
poem without your comment.
themoonman
Glad to see the man in the moon actually exists.
The explanation was to provide my own commentary on the connection between society and politics.
I think the Rhyku on its own clearly indicates that the game (beastly Blue Whale) targets those who are vulnerable (ail) and makes them progress on an series of tasks that ends in death (deadly trail).
I however welcome your opinion and defend your right to express your opinion.
Thanks.
OriginalRhyku