I had a thought
The other day
About the things
We do and say
From vicious words
To words of praise
Our acts of love
To our malaise
Why, we as humans
Have such extremes
From mass destruction
To building dreams
BOEMS BY JA 196
I had a thought
The other day
About the things
We do and say
From vicious words
To words of praise
Our acts of love
To our malaise
Why, we as humans
Have such extremes
From mass destruction
To building dreams
BOEMS BY JA 196
Style/Type: Free verse
Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft
Comments
Welcome to Neo...
Very nice rhyme! I like the rhythm and the words seem to flow smoothly, in a nice example of what I think is great rhyme. The whole thing hangs together well and I have no criticisms. [ Although you might try to keep your signature a little more apart from the body of the work.] I hope that you find Neopoet a place to post often and you take advantage of some of the many workshops that we offer. You will find that the poets here are very fair minded and will give you constructive criticism and try to help you any way possible. We have a monthly contest for all poets on the site and even if you don't win the prize, you get a great deal of exposure and may learn something about a different style. If you have questions, ask! Someone will help you. I hope to see you post much more here and look forward to seeing more of your work. ~ Geezer.
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great title
which connects the poem to a needed irony. The poem is simple but nicely expands, almost infinitely.
Personally I feel your poetry would be better served with punctuation. You see the value of a comma.
see the value of a question mark, or semi colon.
Although there are no rules, but I believe you must choose with or without punctuation- but having just some makes the poem less "professional" or "finished" to me. As one of the very few tools we have a poets, this IS a big deal. As big as using shading in a pencil drawing.
Greetings
Always good to see a bit of rhyme in a sea of free verse lol. Welcome to Neopoet......stan