Shall I tell you all about myself
Shall I tell you who I am?
You've read the form that I filled out
Seen my face on computer cam
My likes and dislikes, my taste in clothes
What I like to eat for lunch
Do you think that we should ever meet?
I'm liking you a bunch!
Tell me all about yourself
Don't leave out a thing
I want to know what there is to know
Do you play guitar or sing?
What do you read, and talk about?
The movies that you like
I love Sci-Fi and thriller types
I ride a motorbike
Date Night ...
Well, what shall we talk about
Is there something left to say?
This date has been such a bore
At least, I like you anyway
There's nothing that I want to know
That isn't on your sheet
I guess that we are finished now
[ I'm glad it was Dutch Treat]
Comments
fun and self contained...no
fun and self contained...no sidetracks or drifting from its purpose
one pet peeve; the word "anyways" ... the 'any ' part implies the plural...no 's' is required
...maybe the last stanza could be tightened a bit
a relevant piece on today's social conventions
thanks and regards,
Not sure...
about how to tighten up the last stanza, but took your crit about the [ess]. Thanks, ~ Gee.
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the 2nd line , last stanza is
the 2nd line , last stanza is where I stumble
I hear it better as "that isn't on your sheet"
it's your call!
thanks,
Now, that you...
mention it, I do like the line that you suggested better. It sounds smoother.
good humour poem
when a poem is cute, funny, Odgen Nashy, I think it just transcends critical commentary. I mean this poem is just very funny. That's not easy. Thanks.
There was this cute commercial on TV in which 2 people meet and immediately express the truth, that they expect this to suck and have already made plans for later...and the voice says "wouldn't it be great if we all just spoke the truth"...then goes on to sell something...it is very poignant.
Like your poem.
Yes, I've seen...
that commercial. I don't know if the world is ready for that kind of honesty. Most people get defensive when you say stuff like that, but it is rather cute and I get the point of the commercial. Thanks for the comparison to Ogden Nash. A poet that connects with lots of people, because of his humor and subtle sarcasm. I haven't read all of his works, but have read enough to know that he and I would have been great friends. ~ Gee.
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thank god
I'm not a part of the dating scene now days. Computer profiles, face book lies, smart phone phonies and cougars prowling lol.......stan
Yeah, back in the day...
It was just payphones, letters, blind dates, chicks, wolves and old maids. Lol
Maybe there is a poem in there somewhere? ~ Gee.
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