@YungPrinzeT
27/06/2017
THERE IS A HOME
There is a home,
That accommodate a shattered soul,
& mysteriously patch-make it into one piece, a whole.
To the pride & arrogant,
It is invisibly malignant,
Whereas to the invariably benevolent,
It is obvious & exclusively magnificent.
Although the outside look rough & unattractive
As though worn out from so much grief.
But in it is a great stock of wealth,
Love & good health.
It is a place of sanctuary & of peace.
The freshness of its atmosphere comes with so much ease.
The down-hearted trade her pain with it
& gains a huge profit of elevating love forthwith.
All dern are safe therein
With no sign of daring.
Comfortability in this home is at its pinnacle,
Yet it comes with a due of affordable value.
What is this haven
With the serenity as like a heaven?
This is not home for goats but for the sheep.
There is a home, it is called FRIENDSHIP.
Poroye Ezekiel Tobiloba (POET)
CEO, Palace of Exclusive Thoughts
yungprinzee@gmail.com
Comments
Nice theme
Structure is very important to your readers;
Break up into stanzas maybe of 4;
For example;
There's a home
I find hard to build;
every brick I place
slip away.
My cement is weak
it won't harden;
It's always wet
It never dries.
This is play on words to suggest how you can break up your poem structurally.
thanks Barbara but this is
thanks Barbara but this is more of a descriptive poem. like talking about the home called friendship.
about the stanza, I'll fix that. thank you, you've been helpful
Welcome
Yeah I know. Great subject.