Sight of Love

I hadn't seen you in 3 days.
your face was becoming less
of a face and more of a general
idea. I didn't know when I would
see you again and was afraid of
forgetting what you looked like all
together. But when you walked into
the room I realized that I had forgotten
the little details that make you human.

I had forgotten that voice that I want
to spend all day talking to. I had forgotten
your personality and made you just an
image to crave. When you're gone I'm
blind, I see things only with the main idea.
but with you I see every inside joke, every
little breath taking detail. the sight of love
is not one to yearn for but to fear.

About This Poem

Last Few Words: this is about someone i really love and i wanted to share my thoughts of him with you.

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Country/Region: yuma az

Favorite Poets: Neil Hilborn

Comments

For starters always best to spell three than type 3.

The rest I love, it is sensitive, honest and lovely in the nature of absent love.
I love that you love spoken word, I believe it is the real roots of poetry.
Here is my reading-
https://soundcloud.com/neopoet/sight-of-love-by-scooby
If you like it I could post it to our Neopoet.com Facebook site, and to credit it properly you might like to give your full name.