fink555
fink555
Jun 07, 2017

Aquaponics (prose poem)

The geisha floated by in a break neck posture, her head rotating with a voluble of "Vrrrr", a vacuum buzz. I remained puzzled as to who, incidentally, she might be, and why a china doll had the bulbous, greasy scales of a crocodile. Each time she passed her the slurping, granite impasse of her dragging grew more sickening. Plus, the small tinfoil hexagons of her scales weren't even consistently shaped.

They were tricks, shedding Rorschach puzzles darkening in a slow hiss on me, the somnambulist. Her midsection was a series of hypnagogic laces with a mini hand fan that stuck together in ripples of cryogenic moths littered with pond water spots, tracing letters in dribbling gold filigree.

She became hypnotic. I had the sort of fixation one has..as with a slowly exposing set of glass teeth bearing your high school locker number kneaded in ink-stained kneads of white larvae. I pulled my eyelashes till they were bits of licorice and my eyes went belly up in my head. The organ's numerology shone in the felt cobalt Chinoiseries I had been gluing to my ceiling most of this week. Wednesdays were the worst; I had to leave her in the freezer.

“Goodbye”, I whispered, already aware that she was gone."

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Country/Region: Albany NY

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weirdelf

In case you read this before I fix it I just realised the reading was really noisy so need to redo it

fink555

That would be great!

My surname is John Thomas Allen

weirdelf

Found several John Thomas Allens on Facebook but none of them look like you. I'm there as Jess Tapper (definitely only one of them [grins]) so look me up so I can invite you to the page.